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Post by Seras Victoria on Jun 23, 2006 6:10:42 GMT -5
Well he isn't in it unless he is Wolfie  @zb, I think that is suppose to be you ;D "Leaning on his shotgun" "Dead and butchered" |
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Post by uwasawaya on Jun 23, 2006 12:39:21 GMT -5
ZB, listen to the lady man. And yep, Macon's there... heh. And Soul, I'm apalled!... I drink white russians... lol... besides, it's been raining too dang much for the beach. And no, I didn't include myself, though I'm putting a bit of myself into Wolf just to get a feel for him for now... who knows what I'll do with him. I'll definitely do more, just need to find some time. I'm glad you guys liked it! |
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Post by Dr. Macon Dead on Jun 23, 2006 13:18:56 GMT -5
the one soldier, the one who was told to make something dead or whatever Definately me. I say that all the time in online games. ;D Very interesting and action-packed...looking forward to the sequel. |
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Post by uwasawaya on Jun 27, 2006 18:00:54 GMT -5
Continued, now with indent! EDIT: nevermind... indent failed... sigh...
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Wolf tried to brush the smoke-drawn tears from his eyes and found that his arms were useless. He was in hell, it was the only place he could be. All around him were melting corpses, burning brightly as their hairless, faceless bodies blackened on the stakes they were mounted on. There were hundreds of them, and they mocked him in their serenity, despite the raging nightmare around them.
Fire raged about him, mixed with the smell of burning fuel. The twisted corpse of some monstrous iron leviathan spewed liquid flame, it's broken, twisted arms twitching uselessly. He was trapped by a piece of it's body that had fallen over his legs. He screaming, but did not know for whom he cried.
Hands moved into his vision, followed by a human form. It was the pretty Asian girl who saved him... named him... she was spattered with blood. Her dead eyes locked onto his, she reached down for him, groping, clawing at him. He didn't have the strength to fight, to scream. He wanted to protest, wanted to live. What would his dead friends say? What would SHE say? Who would carry on their memories?
He looked up again at the face that loomed down ominously, mouth agape and hungry. His last thought was that he never even knew her name.
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His eyes snapped open, breathing heavily. His heart pounded in his chest like a caged animal, and the wind passing through the cabin was chilly with the sweat that soaked his skin. He was still in the helicopter, not in hell, not surrounded by the dead, and not being eaten. For the first time, he wasn't alone when he woke up.
He glanced over at the girl who just moments ago was trying to bite off his face. She slept, head hanging forward.
"Bad dream?" A voice said, startling him out of his thoughts. He glanced to the soldier sitting next to him, the one with the mostly covered 'A' patch. "Sorry if I startled you," he added.
Wolf nodded and sighed. "Yeah, I have them a lot... but then again, I guess everything around here is a bad dream now," he muttered. Turning to look at the soldier again, he asked, "So what's your name?"
The soldier began to point to his name tag, and then saw that it was covered by his weapon straps. "Oh. Abyx. Nice to meet you," he said, offering his hand, which Wolf shook. "What kind of name is Abyx?" he asked. "What kind of name is Wolf?" he replied.
The young survivor shrugged. "Good point. Where you from?"
"Jersey," Abyx replied, "before... you know, the outbreak." He paused for a minute, and then looked at Wolf. "You're from the Midwest, right? Your tag said so... so where you there when it happened?" he asked. His companion nodded as he ran a hand through his disheveled hair. "Only the beginning," Wolf said, "we were lucky... no one knew where the hell they came from... just overran everything... the government got some people out, but the National Guard, the police, the military... they couldn't get organized in time. I saw the first walls... they just barricaded the entire eastern half of the U.S., and left everyone to their fate. The rest of us were in the way, so they sent us over here. Least you guys are doing something," he finished.
Abyx fidgeted a bit. "Wolf, I need to be honest with you... most of us aren't really soldiers..." he said. The young man glanced at him confused.
"A lot of us are volunteers... they train us with guns, give us some pointers, assign us to a troop with some real army folk, and send us out on missions," Abyx explained. He took a breath, then continued. "Most of the time we're sent out to search for survivors, but some times they round of large groups of us and send us to try and hold some arbitrary landmark or cut down their numbers... it never works... the damned things just keep coming... and what's worse, the others, those modified things... those are new... they keep changing. It's not a good situation, Wolf..." he finished, and let out a shaky breath.
Wolf sat in silence for a bit, trying to digest all of the information he just learned. He was about to ask more when red light filled the cabin. The pilot leaned around and shouted, "ETA 2 minutes, wake up everyone, we're home."
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Post by Abyx on Jun 27, 2006 18:05:34 GMT -5
This takes place in America? Damn... reminds me of Monster Island. Good stuff.  |
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Post by Dr. Macon Dead on Jun 27, 2006 18:40:22 GMT -5
Indent is tough...I usually just leave two spaces between paragraphs.
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Post by uwasawaya on Jun 27, 2006 21:52:37 GMT -5
No, it takes place in England... I just envisioned the U.S. being overrun, and some refugees being sent overseas
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Post by tabcef on Jun 27, 2006 22:32:27 GMT -5
Dang. This is pretty good stuff.
Then again I normally don't read alot of stories, haw..
So, do you have any idea where you're going with this?
And more importantly who are ya gonna kill off first?
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Post by soulscythe on Jun 28, 2006 0:26:17 GMT -5
Thumbs up man. It easily reads as good as some story from a professional author. When exactly did you say, you'll call Romero and write the rest of the script for his next film? |
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Post by uwasawaya on Jun 28, 2006 2:07:04 GMT -5
You never know! I'm actually trying to get a job in television/film... who knows... I always wanted to show a zombie-esque tale from a gritty, warlike viewpoint... interesting note though, did you ever notice that in almost all zombie films, the zombies themselves are never that dangerous until something that a human or group of humans does ruins it for the rest?
And as for who I'm going to kill off... kinda tough to think about... not sure yet, and I have an idea of where I'm going, we'll just have to see how the road gets there.
I'm glad you guys are enjoying it!
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Post by zombieButcher on Jun 28, 2006 5:40:37 GMT -5
The soldier with the shotty should survive  |
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Post by Seras Victoria on Jun 28, 2006 6:20:39 GMT -5
Hmm So what was I in the dream? Siren? Stalker? ^-^ If you need to add some dramatic death of one of the soldiers I'd volunteer, as I help myself in those situations all the time.... Besides even if I died it would not make it an unhappy ending. Actually I'm probably one of the only players that ever died in the 1.0.. Just.. Don't let me become one of THEM  |
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Post by soulscythe on Jun 28, 2006 7:31:40 GMT -5
You never know! I'm actually trying to get a job in television/film... who knows... I always wanted to show a zombie-esque tale from a gritty, warlike viewpoint... interesting note though, did you ever notice that in almost all zombie films, the zombies themselves are never that dangerous until something that a human or group of humans does ruins it for the rest? This is so true! There is always the point in a movie, when someone does something "smart" and messes everything up, which wants we to smack the guy/girl on the forehead repeadetly with something heavy. But hey, the movie HAS to go on somehow and I don't think anyone would enjoy watching the characters just sitting in a shopping mall, counting the minutes. |
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Post by Abyx on Jun 28, 2006 9:34:48 GMT -5
If you need to add some dramatic death of one of the soldiers I'd volunteer, as I help myself in those situations all the time.... Besides even if I died it would not make it an unhappy ending. Actually I'm probably one of the only players that ever died in the 1.0.. Just for that, I vote Lara doesn't die. |
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Post by uwasawaya on Jun 28, 2006 12:41:13 GMT -5
Hmm So what was I in the dream? Siren? Stalker? ^-^ If you need to add some dramatic death of one of the soldiers I'd volunteer, as I help myself in those situations all the time.... Besides even if I died it would not make it an unhappy ending. Actually I'm probably one of the only players that ever died in the 1.0.. Just.. Don't let me become one of THEM What is that supposed to mean? That's a terrible thing to say! I bet there isn't anyone on the forum who'd NOT be unhappy at the prospect of your gruesome zombie death. Except for Alex, he might get a chuckle out of it. Creator's pride and all. In the dream, probably a stalker, since you had your hands free. As for who dies, you'll just have to wait and see. This isn't survivor. No taking bets. |
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